My Room
Well, in my living room of this we noticed that there is a staircase that is used to access the first floor of the house, we also observe the wooden door in the entrance, a sofa next to the bench, and under the stairs there is a small shelf to put some abjects.
Addson barbosa aurelino
MA16B
Hello Addson Barbosa how are you today? I like your writing it is nice, but there is something wrong. First of all, in your first sentence there is no indentation, but it is the main criteria of a paragraph use it for the next time. second, in your topic sentence you have to use your title as topic sentence like "My room is the best room in my home." and also,your starting way is informal. on the other hand, there are punctuation mistake it called "comma splice" you use comma on improper way. Also, you aren't describe your room as well.when you add some thing, it is going to be perfect. shortly, if you work some it is perfect.
ReplyDeleteHi
DeleteJust to inform you, I am a student and I am learnig English as a second language.
The aim of this work is the interaction not the correction.
Why don´t you write about something instead of criticizing me?
I want to apologize to you for my comment. It was a misunderstanding, and I do not consider myself a teacher. Also, I didn't mean to criticize you. I wanted to practice my learnings and give a comment about your writing, but I made a mistake, so please forgive me. I would like to be your friend. My teacher also told me this wasn't the best way to give comment, so let's forget about this and start all over again. Thank you.
DeleteI think it's beautiful, the decoration
ReplyDeleteShe rained, beautiful her room.
ReplyDeleteHello Addson am Yemeserach, and am ESL student at NOVA. Today I want to tell you about my bed room.
ReplyDeleteMy bed room is the best interesting place for me. There are three bed rooms in my home one is for me. Actually, I share my room with my little sister, and it has two beds, clothet, and small table. my room is not Massey at hole, but my clothet is kind of Massey. Most of the time, my sister love make trouble at clothet by finding clothe. The small table found in the middle of two beds. It has a lot of books and water bottle. Shortly, my bed room is kind place for relaxing.
My First Thanksgiving
ReplyDeleteMy plan for the next two weeks is celebrating my first Thanksgiving holiday with my family. All my family members are going to travel to Maryland. We are celebrate Thanksgiving with my older sister in her house. For most of us, is this is our first Thanksgiving holiday, and hopefully it will be the best holiday.